"children should never be taught by parents" do you agree?

Some people claim that children should never be taught by parents. I believe that learning skills start basically(S) at home.Moreover(P),the early(the earlier)(G) you teach your kids, the best(the better)(G) ability of learning will be achieved by them in the future.In(P) this essay,(P) I will be illustrating the positive and negative impacts of teaching by parents at home.

A lot of studies has(have)(G) shown that chidren’s teaching during the first five years of life is important to provide them with skills of receiving, understanding and getting the(G) information.Yuonger(P/S) children learn through their bodies ,eyes,ears, hands and legs.This(P) is initiated by parent(You can use joining words.For example, the preceding sentence can be written as:Younger children learn through their................which is initiated by parents.) Teaching kids(WC)(children)the alphabets (G) , numbers, colours, names and verbs will provide them with strong ability to practise(S) talking . The(P) intimate relationship between family members is enough to give children the love of sharing others activities(vague).As a result(S), good interactions with other friends will improve their language.Parents do know the weak points in(G)(of) their sons or(G)(and) daughters,(P) and they can treat it(WC)(those) easily(S), thus, preparing them to(G)(for) kindergarten and school.The process of teaching does not stop after joining schools.It is dual action exerted by teachers , mothers and fathers(parents). Each defect is corrected by one of this process members(WC) .However(P), it needs educated parents.(In the first paragraph,Ameinah has discussed the advantages of teaching by parents at home.In the next paragraph,she is supposed to write about the disadvantages.Let us see how she proceeds.)


If you visit speech physiotherapy(WC)(speech theray) clinics, you will find that most of the patients were negligible(G)(neglected) by their parents.In my point of view(in my view point or from my point of view), isolation of children from surrounding(nurturing) environment, due to social problems such as divorce , drug addiction and alcoholism, contributes to deterioration of their learning skills.In addition , it precipitates to gaining(leads to the development) of bad behaviors and psychological illnesses. Kids(WC/repitition) under these circumstances will develop feeling of inequity(WC) and they will hate(dislike) people, schools and society .Their concentration and understanding ability will be lost.on the other hand, social workers observed that parents who are applying pressure on their children in order to feed them facts and information by force will end by(G) similar problem.There should be a balance in teaching kids. (So,she has narrated the negative side of parental teaching:the results of neglecting children and teaching them by force.)


It is a message to all concerned people, development of educated and aware(enlightened) children depends on how much we give them from our time and the way we introduce things to them by patience, love and wise(wisdom).Education and teaching by parents and schools is important for the progress of our counties.

Another great effort by Ameinah,better than the first essay in many respects.

Ameinah,in the intro and body you have descirbed advantages and disadvantages of teaching by parents at home,whereas in the conclusion you have suggested the importance of school teaching as well.Had you developed an argument around the advantages of parental teaching versus school teaching,your conclusion would have matched better with your THESIS STATEMENT.Your opinion,Mr.Tony? Well, first of all thank you so much for taking the trouble to review Ameinah's fine essay, Dr Rashid. I agree that the conclusion does not 'amplify' and complement the introduction. Ameinah ended up suggesting a kind of 'partnership' between home and school but she did not make this explicit. Nevertheless she has plenty of ideas and now we need to hammer them into a logical, coherent framework that delivers the goods. I must say that Ameinah's approach to essay writing and blog posting is most admirable - well done, young lady! Please excuse me, it is rather late after a looooong Tuesday...

Tony

Suggested essay format:

Intro:
First sentence:One side of the argument - advantages of teaching by parents....
Second sentence:The other side of the argument - advantages of teaching at school...
Third sentence:Thesis statement and writer's stance:I shall analyse two sides of the argument......... .I suggest a balanced approach or this/that approach....

Body;
First Paragraph
.Opening sentence - Elaborate first argument.
.Rest of sentences- Ideas to support the argument with examples and evidence
Second Paragraph
.Opening sentence - Elaborate the other side of argument
.Rest of sentences - Ideas to suport second argument with examples and evidence.
Conclusion:
Summarise arguments,state your position and suggest a solution.




AMEINAH