Writing task 1(Home work).. + CORRECTIONS (tb)
The chart deals with the amount of money spent in (prep) different goods in Germany, Italy, France and Britain.
In Britain, photographic films took the priority .the (P) amount declined gradually (WC) in buying toys , CDs and perfumes.Tennis and personal stereos were almost the same (to be consumed through which) with 159 thousands (G) pound being spent. [Why write the figure in words and numbers? Can we do it in a neater way?]
The same good (G) (photographic films) were considered as number one to be used in French;155 thousand pound sterling were consumed .Toys and CDs remained steady at 159 thousand pound. Regarding perfumes , tennis and personal stereos, they showed a slight decline (than) in comparison with the formers (G) . However, they were all more or less equal.
In Italy, toys were the most (WC) selling good, where as (S), others had a very mild (WC) difference in consuming (G/WC),but were almost the same .
158 thousand pound was the ???? amount of money used for tennis racquets in Germany, which is considered the highest (than others) category / consumed item.
From the overall perspective, Britain was the (most costing) (WC) highest spending among the four Europian (S) countries while Germany was the least (WC) opposite of "highest"???.
NOURA
Good effort from Noura, don't you all think? You are following the formula and giving significant facts, overall trends and the "big" picture at the end.
The biggest problem is (WC) - using the appropriate terms in an interesting and correct manner.
Well done Noura - try to correct the mistakes I have left for you to think about.
Will look at your task 2 later on...
BFN
Tony
In Britain, photographic films took the priority .the (P) amount declined gradually (WC) in buying toys , CDs and perfumes.Tennis and personal stereos were almost the same (to be consumed through which) with 159 thousands (G) pound being spent. [Why write the figure in words and numbers? Can we do it in a neater way?]
The same good (G) (photographic films) were considered as number one to be used in French;155 thousand pound sterling were consumed .Toys and CDs remained steady at 159 thousand pound. Regarding perfumes , tennis and personal stereos, they showed a slight decline (than) in comparison with the formers (G) . However, they were all more or less equal.
In Italy, toys were the most (WC) selling good, where as (S), others had a very mild (WC) difference in consuming (G/WC),but were almost the same .
158 thousand pound was the ???? amount of money used for tennis racquets in Germany, which is considered the highest (than others) category / consumed item.
From the overall perspective, Britain was the (most costing) (WC) highest spending among the four Europian (S) countries while Germany was the least (WC) opposite of "highest"???.
NOURA
Good effort from Noura, don't you all think? You are following the formula and giving significant facts, overall trends and the "big" picture at the end.
The biggest problem is (WC) - using the appropriate terms in an interesting and correct manner.
Well done Noura - try to correct the mistakes I have left for you to think about.
Will look at your task 2 later on...
BFN
Tony
posted by Anonymous at
2:15 pm
2 Comments:
Bravo Noura!
I will look at this task 1 report tomorrow, Friday - I promise!
I've just come back from seeing the "Brothers Grimm" film at Marina Mall.
Zeena enjoyed it, though it was a bit scarey in places. It was a very entertaining film with a conventional happy ending after lots of twists and turns.
Good night blogmates!
Tony
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Tony Beale, at 10:36 pm
I am always happy, Mr Fox, unless people set out to annoy me and don't listen!
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Tony Beale, at 9:10 pm
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